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    dots Submission Name: Clocks of Mendots
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    Author: Mandolin
    ASL Info:    10/15/89
    Elite Ratio:    5.4 - 131/145/85
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Inspired by the Karen Campbell (Artist.)

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    dotsClocks of Mendots
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    Jingles like hammers when there are bells at the doors
    Wishing for nothing whence they cry evermore
    We’ve ticked and we’ve tocked, till we dry’d up our heads
    And we’ve lied to our mothers while we’ve laid in our beds
    The imagery of ladders will be our staple tomorrow
    Can’t question their direction, mustn’t question our sorrow
    There’s that fly on the wall lacking wings on its back
    And I’m here on the ground with my two legs intact
    Doors have been closed since doors have existed
    And I’m just wondering why this hasn’t been resisted
    Rancid waters have been recycled again and again
    So, it’s not romantic, that we’re standing in mist, then [?]
    The bells that are screaming are the worst sound of all
    For they mark in hour-glass periods the fall of us all




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      Does that come from the contemplation of mortality while living a life of "quiet desperation". (Henry David Thoreau)

    I'm feeling that a lot lately, whereas there were many years I never gave it a moments thought, but then, it could have been denial all along. I'll have to check out more because they say "misery loves company".
    | Posted on 2007-07-03 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      The different stages of life. I love this, you had a rhythm and a flow to it, and it brought me back to something someone said to me that "Everthing has an ebb and flow to it.", so I love that, and I have a soft spot for poems that rhyme, that makes me feel so young. Hehe, about the actual content of it I loved that too, you have the imagery, with the ladder, which I loved, and then you have the weird things people do, like pee in the shower. Youre poem sort of epitomizes life, and it reminds me of the poem by William Shakespeare, but I can't remember the name of it right now. Anyhow, I thought this was a great write, and there is nothing wrong with the last rhyming words being all twice. I like it too! Great write!
    Be blessed,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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