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    dots Submission Name: If, a couple of daft 'unsdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 984
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 561



    Description:
       Just a couple of little things I wrote for my baby tonight.
    They made her smile and she thinks I should share them.


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    dotsIf, a couple of daft 'unsdots
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    If I were!

    If I were a Genie I'd grant you all your wishes
    If I were a God I'd answer your prayers
    If I were the wind I'd supply you with air
    but I am just a man who has not much to give
    So I give you my all for as long as I live.

    Love!

    If I believed in heaven
    and the life of God above
    Then heaven would be your embrace
    and my God would be your love



    Yup, I'm smitten




    Submitted on 2007-02-09 20:03:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aw.... how simply adorable! There is nothing bad to say about this whatsoever, it's just lovely! Aw... this is so cute, this sounds like vows, and I especially like this stanza.
    "If I believed in heaven
    and the life of God above
    Then heaven would be your embrace
    and my God would be your love"

    So totally and completely adorable, and emotion filled. Great job! Squee! This makes my night...or morning... ahh! after midnight!
    Be blessed,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha, very cute. I'm sure your girlfriend truly adores this. Now... if you ever pop the question, this would be a great poem to read out in front of your friends and relatives to show how you really feel, without all the pomp and overstated glamour which usually accompanies weddings...

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2007-02-09 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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