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    dots Submission Name: living to livedots
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    Author: xana
    ASL Info:    17/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 34/35/24
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 799
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    Bytes: 359



    Description:
       I think that when people live, nobody really lives. We never take any chances, we are afraid of what people think. We depend on other's opinion, and nobody really sees anything around them.
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    dotsliving to livedots
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    Living for death is living for fear,
    Living for fear is living for death.
    While we live we never hear
    The calling of Life, the shreaking of Death.

    Living for life is living for freedom
    Living for freedom is living for life.
    Hearing the scent and tasting the rythm
    No one will ever....from fear of Life.




    Submitted on 2007-02-10 12:53:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey i liked this poem.

    i wanna live u know to be.
    just plain BE.

    in the state of being urself.

    ur true self.

    cuz somethimes ur true self gets lost in ur sociaty driven and influenced self.
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not so fond of the repetition, but that's a personal opinion. 'from fear of Life' should probably be 'for fear of life' in order to conform with your other sentences. Also, 'shreaking' should be 'shrieking.'
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by saartha | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful format, short simple, thats the way i like it, i hate it when i have to read forever to get the point.(dont care if it is long as point is ovoius). many propts
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]


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