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    dots Submission Name: Loch Ness Monsterdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 504
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1411



    Description:
       Just meesin around.... just really bored i know alot poeple wont like it but whatever... just leave some comments..
    thanks

    Max
    Aka
    Lil'Mix


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    dotsLoch Ness Monsterdots
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    listen!!! listen!!! listen!!!
    yea!!! yea!!! yeah!!!

    Im like the loch ness monster in dis game
    in the hood u don't see me,
    but u hear story about me.

    This is a lyrical contest
    U know who da best
    tell ur fat ass bitch sit done an take a rest.
    I told u already,
    That im da best
    I anin't no bitch like 50 cent
    I don't need a bullet proof vest!!

    So I hence what i'm saying
    Always hear u complaning
    Da words dat i'm Spiting is like a damn blizzard
    catch a cold in da dezert
    In ur hood Iím camouflaged like a damn lizard

    I know what cha thinking
    This shit is wack
    But yeah
    It might be the worst rhyme that I spit
    but still at the end of the night
    who still fucking ur bitch!!!!!!
    While ur home all alone giving dome to da pope
    U never knew that your bitch hooker name was "Hope"
    Blessing the whole squad for just a dollar.
    Sent her on my way, But I told her to stop and gave my boyz a hollar
    At the end of the night,
    she made a pretty dollar.

    Don't have your bitch,
    Three weeks from now
    don't come to me and saying dat im the father
    there is 40 some posibility 'n not including da inner city(M.O.B. CITY)




    Submitted on 2007-02-10 13:40:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Lovely. quite lovely. lol. don't see why people won't comment. :) you should put some more stuff on here some time. something new.
    | Posted on 2007-03-01 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm there were some interesting lines, like catching a cold in the dessert. and i liked the way you started it. the idea of being a loch ness monster.
    but all the [censored] this and [censored] that dragged it down. Ones you started down that road, all the imagination went out the window.
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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