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    dots Submission Name: Snowdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 837
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       I made this one a few years ago during my freshman english class. It's old now, but I'm still fond of it.


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    dotsSnowdots
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    What fools we humans are,
    To dance amidst the snow;
    Frolicking where death has come
    While the harsh winds blow.

    Can we not see the leaves,
    Frost covering their brittle flesh?
    Flakes envelop the world
    In a thick, prison-like mesh.

    What fools we humans are,
    To dance amidst the snow;
    Catching death upon our tongues,
    Injecting cold into our souls.




    Submitted on 2007-02-10 17:41:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece. It's short and yet to the point. I love the way the snow was used opposite of how it's usually used. It's being used in your piece in truth showing the death of nature it causes rather than a lovely sight to see. It shows the other side of something beautiful. The darker more realistic side we all poses. It was a good write with great imagery behind it. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2011-12-19 00:00:00 | by stormybluerose | [ Reply to This ]
      very very good, I liked this alot. It had great imagery, and a very clever idea behind it. What can I say, freshman english class passed.
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]


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