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    dots Submission Name: Suicide Directions/ Warning:dots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Okay, i was using this in my book that im writting, i do not condone suicide, even thought i have attempted it when i was younger. now that im older, and have a family i realize that there is no point, things wil always get better even if it doesnt seem like so.


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    dotsSuicide Directions/ Warning:dots
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    Suicide directions are as follows:
    Use an ordinary kitchen knife, found in a drawer
    Insert it into the wrist, with great force
    Cut along both wrists, from left to right, and then side to side
    Inducing a sedative prior to these actions is preferred
    Do remember this procedure is very permanent so
    Ensure this is the final step you wish to take

    WARNING:
    All of the following directions are permanent
    Remember that there is always help out there and
    No one is ever alone and
    I know from personal experience that this is
    Not A
    Good idea

    Death




    Submitted on 2007-02-10 19:19:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha. this is great.
    very verrry original.
    loved it.
    who would've thought.
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by deathbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      YOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Wow I like it, nice work I like the visual and how it felt real and especially with emotion, I like this poem alot I hope to read more from you as I hope you will read from me anyways, again you did a good job, keep it up peace & stay safe.... -Cordell
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      In the spirit of Terry Pratchette, Agree on the this poem, that to follow that course of action, will definitely be your last.

    But the sad truth is if you've never been there (depressed, and so low) at that knives edge or razor blade, you won't know what it means to contemplate these actions, and the warning is correct there is always someone out there that will listen, because at that time when the opportunity presents itself, it looks like the only way and the right way which it is definitely not correct.

    This was a necessary write, and glad that someone voiced it it, great write.

    Kind regards
    Eric
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by bornx2000 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well, I liked it very much. I do not have anything negitive to say about it. This was very clever, and very true. Sorry, I don't say more, but time time online is limited. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Razor
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by brknprlcndol | [ Reply to This ]
      Suicide is a bus with one destination. But there never is a next station.

    I'm actually surprised you chose to write a sort of suicide poem in this format, along with a warning.
    Putting the warning at the end was perhaps a good idea.
    You've written about suicide utilising only the slashing wrists method, strange you did not mention the more common way of killing oneself, jumping off buildings..
    Apart from that, I agree, it's definitely not a good idea.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-02-10 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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