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Past tense of the Present

Author: Perpetualdreamz
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Past tense of the Present

I had wished
I had dreamed
I had prayed.

It was always had about something I have.

Submitted on 2007-02-10 20:34:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Would of written the last sentence slightly different

"It was always had about something I have."
"It was always about something I have."

Not sure how the title connects to the poem?

Not sure but the poem seemed to be to short, why not elaborate a little bit more, what was the something?

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| Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by bornx2000 | [ Reply to This ]

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