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    dots Submission Name: Disrupted Daydreamingdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 230/384/131
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       A quick poem on that moment of confusion when you come out of a daydream. At least, this is how I feel.


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    dotsDisrupted Daydreamingdots
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    What year is this? What era
    Have I awoken to?
    I have spent centuries
    Adrift upon an astral plane.
    I have spent centuries
    Dreaming pensive, nostalgic dreams
    Tinged with the melancholy
    Of a thousand years.




    Submitted on 2007-02-10 20:55:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like this. very simple and nice flow. good write!
    Write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      How dreamlike and peaceful. I feel almost calm and daydream myself after reading this. I'll definitely feel different about being brought back to reality. My favourite part has to be all of it, especially the ending, it's just..well, so well pulled off. "of a thousand years" has a sort of cliffhanger quality, except not really thrilling, just more peaceful.
    Thank you for sharing.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]


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