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river


Author: angel_lou
ASL Info:    19/m/uk
Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 4 /6 /7
Words: 71
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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quick poem off the top!!!


river



A river will flow,
Away from the source,
Always heading down stream.

Much like my mind,
It twists and turns,
Making its way to the sea.

Only one difference,
That I can see,
Between my mind and a stream.

Where one is dark,
A river is clear,
Most unlike my head.

This my story,
I hope you enjoy,
This is all,

The end of my show!!!




Submitted on 2007-02-10 21:12:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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