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    dots Submission Name: Raindots

    Author: foxy lee
    ASL Info:    20 f/CT/SA
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 27/23/10
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    When I listen to the sound of the rain
    as it falls from the grey skies above
    I hear the sound of nature's calls
    as peaceful as a white dove

    No words can capture its beauty
    no painting can portray its worth
    as the rain falls gently from the sky
    to the thirsty waiting earth

    The rain is pure and tranquil
    with every drop that descends
    caressing all my senses
    to my soul a message it sends

    When I hold my face towards the sky
    and let the rain slide down my face
    my mind goes blank with wonder
    as I succumb to its embrace

    When the heavens open up
    and shower its gift upon me
    standing there
    no reason, no purpose
    my love for rain
    is infinity

    Submitted on 2007-02-11 06:35:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it. You used am intresting subject. but it flowed nice. Could have had some more personal feeling in it. But all in all a good read.
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by Cokesu | [ Reply to This ]
      it was simple and good and the rhyme was really good. good stuff. i enjoyed it. i understood it -- for some reason i have been having a little trouble understanding some of the stuff around, but yours was easy to grasp -- which is good:)
    | Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this poem for me it is difficult to write using a steady form of rhyme and rhythm but you did a wonderful job.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ishtar | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a difficult subject to craft a poem around. It has been used for centuries. If one chooses to tackle such a subject one needs to be truly original. How did it make YOU feel, what did it smell like to YOU and etc. Personalize it and try to stay away from clichés, I am soory I cannot be more positive but I felt like " the same ole, same ole" with this piece.

    your friend
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]

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