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    dots Submission Name: War of the Wordsdots
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    Author: saartha
    ASL Info:    27/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 230/385/134
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       This is an allegorical poem using war as a metaphor for creating poetry/prose. This pretty much describes my writing process.


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    dotsWar of the Wordsdots
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    Somewhere—

    Between the turbulence
    Of ink and mauled words,
    frenzied fingers racing
    to the backspace bomb
    (Delete delete-delete-delete),
    And the subdued euphoria
    Of leaning back and watching
    As the survivors of the massacre
    Form solemn lines in eulogy,
    A tribute for their fallen comrades,
    To take one last stand and
    Hurl themselves against the snow—

    There is beauty.




    Submitted on 2007-02-11 12:51:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is good. I like the way you've structured it, so that the whole frenzied "war" takes place between the dashes, with the polished part "somewhere there is beauty" framing it. It's like you've opened a window onto the rawest parts of your writing process that are usually hidden, although I'm sure the words in the centre in fact themselves underwent much editing.

    And yeah, I can definitely relate.

    T x
    | Posted on 2007-06-07 00:00:00 | by tulip | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't usually edit as fanatically as you do, my philosophy is the first time it comes out, it better come out right or it's pointless. As a result, I usually keep the not-so-right ones for when I'm bored and work on them. Occasionally something does come out of that, but it's never "the Azuire style" if you get what I mean.
    I like how you turned a commonplace occurence (to poets anyway) into a deadly war with "delete" as the ultimate weapon. Do you type out your poems on a computer?
    I like the last line "hurl themselves against the snow."
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh yes...I have waged this war. And it is marvelous. And no one can understand unless they have fought alongside you on this literary battlefield. This is perfect...
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interusting concept. Much different than my writing style, which tends to just involve flow to a beat or song in my head, then revision to fit it better, often the next day :-p.
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]


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