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    dots Submission Name: One Teardots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Last Poem I'm Posting, Hopefully People Get To Read It Before I Erase My Page, Thanks To All The People Who Supported Me And Made Me Good At This Poetry Shit, Won't Forget You Guys... Keep On Writing, And Creating Thoughts That Sooth The Soul.

    So Long.

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    dotsOne Teardots

    My Mom always told me,
    Don't cry tears in vain,
    Cry one tear of sorrow,
    And conceal your deepest pain.

    And when the time comes,
    When you can't handle life,
    Don't take the coward's way out,
    Because it works for some,
    But In time,
    You'll be depicted in the sky,
    As a dark cloud.

    Just last night I cried one tear,
    And it vanished in the darkness,
    Within its flow it carried all my wasted years,
    That up to now,
    Have made me cold-hearted.

    So if you see me down,
    With hate flaring in my eyes,
    That's all the times that I tried and tried,
    And all I got was cold stares and frowns,
    Filled with two-faced people,
    Who have now made me cried.

    From this point on,
    You don't know me,
    Don't try to be my friend,
    Because when I begged for friendship,
    It Only made me feel desperate,
    In the End.

    This is my last piece,
    That I write with intolerable pain;
    I can't deny,
    And if one day I cried like a baby,
    Now only one tear fills my eye.

    Submitted on 2007-02-11 13:50:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is raw and real...

    knocks us down like a bullet...pummeling force

    "all i got was cold stares and frowns"

    just one or two smiles could have turned me around...
    sometimes concealing the pain, concealing the tears overwhelms us...we need to release...
    i do like the idea of one tear...that's it, just one...
    that is all there is left to cry...i am cried out and written out...

    my words were flowing like lava from my stone mountain heart...but now the deluge is over...
    and i am walking away, alone as always.

    damn...the has resonance.

    | Posted on 2011-04-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh! please... why are you erasing your page? Please don't do this if the reason is not too compelling.
    Now come to the given poem, I will like to call it an expression cast in bronze that is visibly scalding... the protagonist is a wanderer who has strayed towards the dead end of hope... and chooses hatred for solace. personally speaking , hatred failed to heal the wounds of MY soul and I fear it can't heal yours... the choice still belongs to you.
    This is a very well-written piece, anyway.
    Expecting more.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]

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