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    dots Submission Name: CHAOSdots
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    Author: michelle8586
    ASL Info:    20/F/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 37/39/15
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsCHAOSdots
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    A shattered soul
    On the edge to fade
    My behavior monstrous
    My understanding of these feelings
    Consume me in and out
    Chronic infatuation
    To gratify you by eaten each meal
    I am tired of satisfying you
    I am diseased
    I am broken
    Feel like your deceiving my heart
    My heart which is like thin ice
    I cry for us
    I cry for me




    Submitted on 2007-02-11 13:57:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i quite liked this, the flow i thought was good apart from two lines (To gratify you by eaten each meal and Feel like your deceiving my heart)i think if you reworded them the poem would flow much better, the idea is good i liked it
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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