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Spitting Blood


Author: Aj
ASL Info:    21/M/MI
Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 102 /110 /29
Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
Total Views: 1118
Average Vote:    5.0000
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I hate when friends talk shit. I hate when people assumer they know who I am. I hate when people don't give other people a chance to change they only judge them by the mistakes they've made.


Spitting Blood



you've taken the words right out of my mouth
just to see how quick the word gets around
this is entertainment you don't have muuch else
than a talent for drama, that's what you're all about

there's never a chance to explain my point of view
my words turn to stone as I attempt to tell the truth
you have no idea about the things i've been through
everything I have to gain outwieghs the things i lose

I reach to find my voice and you silence my attempt
every chance that I miss leaves me tasting regret
what more can I give, what more could you expect
an expression is worth a thousand words
so tell me what I meant

and it seems to me that i'll never get ahead
living in the ashes of the words I never said.




Submitted on 2007-02-11 18:06:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really liked this poem. Its something that most everyone goes through, at least I'm going through it, and I know some others. The last line in the last stanza doesn't really make much sense to me, though. I guess it tied in with the title, though. Overall, it was a great poem, and it's going on my favorites!
| Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by xcut_up_angelx | [ Reply to This ]


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