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Doom's Day Countdown (9 mins. - 12)

Author: caballero7137
ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
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This is a prediction of what I think will happen if we don't stop the degregation of the Earth.

Doom's Day Countdown (9 mins. - 12)

Nine oranges sat on logs
ate 40 breeds of dogs
passing through eggnogs.

Eight tinny dwarfish fishes
devoured 80 monkey wrenches
with a side of nicotine patches

Seven skeletal left femurs
swallowed 120 daughters
plus 3 ``Maytag`` dryers

Six Stephen King stories
attacked 160 mounties
while breeding with goalies.

Five innocent looking bushes
ambushed 200 steel crutches
leaving several in commas.

Four cooked all-dressed burgers
chased 240 x chromosome yawners
from 12 different barbers.

Three ``Viagra`` blue brand pills
masticated 280 black & decker drills
beside two old and rusty windmills

Two Huggies disposable diapers
dropped 365 frog greeters
inside a human’s lower gutters.

One little wooden potty chair
with a lone baby in knitwear
with moments before feeling impair

The planet we live is Earth.
A land rich with lush worth.
Let us all chip in for a rebirth!

Submitted on 2007-02-11 18:34:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  verry original in my opinion, i enjoyed reading your work a bit abstract but nicely done, the theme you have picked is also good, we are slowly but surely killing the earth, as we expand and expand, i am sure the moon will be our next victim. i liked this poem ps what are femurs
| Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]

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