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    dots Submission Name: Doom's Day Countdown (9 mins. - 12)dots
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    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       This is a prediction of what I think will happen if we don't stop the degregation of the Earth.


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    dotsDoom's Day Countdown (9 mins. - 12)dots
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    Nine oranges sat on logs
    ate 40 breeds of dogs
    passing through eggnogs.

    Eight tinny dwarfish fishes
    devoured 80 monkey wrenches
    with a side of nicotine patches

    Seven skeletal left femurs
    swallowed 120 daughters
    plus 3 ``Maytag`` dryers

    Six Stephen King stories
    attacked 160 mounties
    while breeding with goalies.

    Five innocent looking bushes
    ambushed 200 steel crutches
    leaving several in commas.

    Four cooked all-dressed burgers
    chased 240 x chromosome yawners
    from 12 different barbers.

    Three ``Viagra`` blue brand pills
    masticated 280 black & decker drills
    beside two old and rusty windmills

    Two Huggies disposable diapers
    dropped 365 frog greeters
    inside a humanís lower gutters.

    One little wooden potty chair
    with a lone baby in knitwear
    with moments before feeling impair

    The planet we live is Earth.
    A land rich with lush worth.
    Let us all chip in for a rebirth!





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      verry original in my opinion, i enjoyed reading your work a bit abstract but nicely done, the theme you have picked is also good, we are slowly but surely killing the earth, as we expand and expand, i am sure the moon will be our next victim. i liked this poem ps what are femurs
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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