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    dots Submission Name: Waiting for the Kiss (revised)dots

    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWaiting for the Kiss (revised)dots

    A little bit over my head
    as the pretty-eyed boy takes me by the hand.
    He leads me to the perfect place-
    I'm just where I want to be.

    I listen to his story,
    As he puts his arms around me-
    It was enough to make me nervous.

    I stare at him, transfixed by his smile,
    and my heart slows down.
    I hold my breath waiting for the kiss.
    I wonder...can he see it on my face?

    We get closer to escape the night's cold,
    I feel the moment approaching, with the tilt of his head,
    and a stroke of my face.

    His lips brush mine
    sending ocean waves crashing through my veins.
    I try not to notice my mind as it escapes my body.
    The intimacy pulls me back into his embrace
    and I am perfectly infatuated.

    Submitted on 2007-02-11 21:54:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      INTENSE effusions beaming from within....
    [It means I enjoyed and nearly shared your anticipation] Breathtaking!

    Well Done.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]

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