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    dots Submission Name: actingdots

    Author: in shadow
    ASL Info:    22/F/ nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 581/277/103
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 749
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Black Heart Valentines
    For my black heart friends
    On this, the blackest holiday
    For hearts

    Love is fool's gold
    And fool's pride

    What can you do
    When nothing seems real
    You’re going through the movements
    Of emotions you can’t feel
    You’re acting out this life
    As if it’s something to you
    Though your only part of the cast
    Only part of the crew
    These masks that you wear
    Like the love that you fake
    It’s only a matter of time
    Till your heart truly breaks
    You’re reciting these lines
    That you’ve memorized
    We’re just watching and waiting
    Until you realize
    All the fame and the glory
    That brought you your dreams
    Has once again betrayed you
    And is cueing your screams
    Here comes the curtain call
    It’s time to take a bow
    Everybody’s smiling
    But you don’t remember how
    The lights leave you exposed
    Now it’s “exit stage right”
    Flee into the darkness
    St. Valentine’s night

    Submitted on 2007-02-12 11:42:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was indeed very well written... ahh BLACK VALENTINES ofcourse... why didnt I think of that, you did anyways... thats good enough for me.
    It makes me think if I have ever fallen in love... or was it always just the lust of which you speak... well you made me think, thats a start...
    well done again I loved it
    I especially liked this part:

    "What can you do
    When nothing seems real
    You’re going through the movements
    Of emotions you can’t feel"

    welcome to my favourites list...
    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by seriouscutter19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, this was deep.
    I liked this one.
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by xgirlxbassistx | [ Reply to This ]
      i think i remember this one
    and long live BLACK VALENTINES!!!!
    still a sweet A poem
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by crazymunchkin | [ Reply to This ]
      That was really good :D makes me think a wee bit you know... sometimes you fall in love, or you think you do, but what it really is, is just a feeling tricking you, something that controls you, that you have an obsession with... *nods*
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by Blood†Tears | [ Reply to This ]

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