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    dots Submission Name: Brandidots
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    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsBrandidots
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    He gave up friends for her
    Gave up a familiar life for her
    Threw away his release for her.
    He gave so much and got nothing back,
    But for some reason he cannot bring himself
    To stop loving her.
    He found an angel in her
    Found honesty in her
    Had love in her.
    He let go of his soul and watched as she shattered it,
    Yet he still cannot bring himself to forget about her.
    He cried fo her
    Changed for her
    Was clean for her
    He gave her his heart and watched her butcher it,
    But he cannot let himself give up on her.
    He fled for her
    He bled for her
    Felt dread for her
    He took her promise and watched her rip it away,
    But he cannot make himself stop wanting her to this day.
    She took him and broke him
    She watched him reborn
    Then she broke him again and left him for dead.




    Submitted on 2007-02-12 11:58:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow...this has leia written all over it man....why do we always manage to get the whores? f u c k e r s!
    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      good write.very sad tho,and i no how you feel.even tho you hate her for what she did you still love her...its so sad,but happens much to often.keep it up sage.
    ~safire~
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      A very personal, and emotive poem. I liked the structure and the repeats of certain ideas and phrases, the repetition makes it stick in your head...
    I also liked the religios connotations that were in the poem...like angel and reborn...it added something special...
    And yes, most people do go through something like this...when they realise that a relationship isn't working because it's not two sided anymore...one person is continually giving - the other is taking and hurting...and then as you said so neatly...leaves you for dead...
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by selfbetrayal | [ Reply to This ]
      verry emotional and sad poem, seems like you went through hell and have had a taste of loves dark side, giving but not recieving, i think all of us go through an expierience like this in some time of our lives, still it hits some harder than others, maybe someday you will find, expierience true love, well i hope to find it too, nice work
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-02-12 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]


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