I Didn't Know (she was a cutter) -------------------------------------------
She was angry with me because I wouldn't listen
She got up and went to get a knife from the kitchen
She said, "listen" with the blade pointing to my chest
"Im tired of this shit"
She ran to the bathroom and locks the door
5-6 hours pass by and all i heard was roars
Yelling screaming my name
But I wouldn’t do a dam thing about it
May be I could off save her from all the pain she went thru
Maybe she would still be here next to me telling me I love you
I knock the door open she was laying on the floor
The knife was deeply stuck in her heart
50 slashes in her arm spelling my name
She was in love with a man who didn’t love her the same
Blood all over the fresh paint wall which I did my self
"HELP ME GOD" written with blood on the mirror
And I swear I saw a saint in the back shed a tear
She was a cutter, which I didn’t know
Dam I should off listen and this wouldn’t happen
Wow alot of emotion. Alittle too much. I mean it seems like you didn't know what to do with all the emotion. It seems a little forced. But overall, I enjoyed it. It seems like it has either happened to you or a friend. Keep writing.
It is very good. I like the flow it was alittle off beat which is good because that means that you beat to your own drum. And your writing I can tell is true. This happened eaither to you or someone you knew. Keep on writing about your past it willl do you well. Keep on writing and don't ever stop. Remember there is always one person who adores your work and reads it all don't stop writing or they will fall. To the floor with nothing to do. The close there eys as want more from you.
frightening, but good.
i don't like the ending though.
"Damn i should of listened and this wouldn't have happened."
you can do better with a piece that describes something so horrific.
yes you can.
reach deep inside yourself.
anyway, nice write.
Really good,I use to be a cutter,and this really see's the whole point.No one listen's to the ones who truly needed it...or need it.I've never went as far as carving someone's name in my arm,but I have thought about it...If people would only listen less people would commit suicide,and less would die ~ferny
it's a really good write, i use to be a cutter and no one would listen, or everyone would trip and say that all i was doin was tryin to get attention, but i never went as far as carving someone's name in my arm. but it's true, people need to listen, cause they might just commit suicide...