I really liked this, it was great at showing hopelessness, while still remaining yourself. I can't say I really saw the money/happiness thing that Ron did, but I guess that's something you should be proud of, you wrote a poem people can interpret in their own way. Just a side note, upon reading the first verse, the writing style seemed off, but as it advanced and was repeated, it made it fit and it worked very well, maybe there is something you could change about the first one, or add before it to make it have the same affect the ones after it have, in that they make it work. I'm not really sure, or I would be more specific, so I'm just sharing my feeling on that small part of what is a good write.
I really really like this write
You speak Great truth with your words
To me you are describing how one does not have to have a lot of things or a lot of money to achieve happiness
I know this as a fact because I live a very happy life with very little money
Happiness cant be bought it is a choice
A way one choices to live their life
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think