Hearts Thief by insphered soul

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Submission Name: Hearts Thief dots

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Author:	insphered soul
ASL Info:	18/M/ Hmmm?
Elite Ratio:	6.56 - 450/375/90
Words:	59

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	312
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	372

Description:
Just kinda came out when I was trying to think of something.

Nothing in specific, just felt like writing.

All comments are appreciated and thank everyone for their time on this.

Zach

Hearts Thief dots

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I gave you my spirit
and you threw it away
acted like it was nothing
just another day

I promised you my love
and you gave me grief
but I won't deny
you were my hearts thief

Cut your soul open
watch the lies bleed out
all the times you promised
I always had my doubts

Submitted on 2007-02-13 10:34:01 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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||| Comments |||
  this was actually pretty cool. like that person *points down* said, the first two lines of your last stanza were kind of...not...idk but it wasnt right, and then the rest of it just brought the whole stanza together. you're magical like that, yu seem to do that with a lot of things

<3amor
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by GoKart Mozart | [ Reply to This ]
   It was pretty good, but bordered on the edge of the cliché, overall I liked it, only one part was really pushing the cliché thing for me.

Cut your soul open
watch the lies bleed out
all the times you promised
I always had my doubts

The first two lines I didn't really like, but the last two I liked alot.
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
  damn , is tis true? I ve never had my heart taken away. i given it away, never been broken... and hope it never happens. this is very good. i like it alot.

erica
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by DrkRomeo_sGirl | [ Reply to This ]

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