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Author: Peggy Paris
ASL Info:    61/F/USA
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Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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"Lo! Death has reared himself a throne"
- Poe, Edgar Allen, 1831, The City in the Sea

This poem is written using the Monotetra form.


In silence, thoughts have taken flight
Like constellations filling night.
Conceptions born in mind ignite
A sleepless plight, a sleepless plight.

Such restlessness abandons sleep
By deeming it a pleasure cheap
As, deep inside, ideas creep
Within mind’s keep, within mind’s keep.

Lo! Death has reared himself a throne
By making weary every bone
And leaving not, unturned, a stone
To sleep postpone, to sleep postpone.

What’s that I see upon the lawn
As hours slip past the telltale yawn?
First light appears and thoughts are gone
with break of dawn, with break of dawn.

Submitted on 2007-02-13 10:48:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love this poem! I don't usually leave comments to people, unless something sticks out, I just wrote a poem about the same thing (same title too, I suppose it's a common one) and wanted to read other peoples poems on the same thing. I liked the quotation of Poe, which is a nice synchronicity, as my poem quotes Lennon. I look forward to reading your other works.
| Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by NoMartyr | [ Reply to This ]
  Very nice, very nice. The rhyming was excellent. I thought it was very soothing. I really like it. The last paragraph was beautiful.
| Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by blue_pixie_dust | [ Reply to This ]
  I usually hate stuff that are taken from parts of other's work..but this one is actually better than Edgar Allen Poe's poem "The City in the Sea"'s not my style but i enjoyed it and very much liked it..great rhythm, flow, portrayal, and very poetic
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
  a pleasure to read, ecxellent rhyming i,ve not heard of it before, but it reads and flows really well. i loved the third stanza, for me it stood out more than the others,yes i think i will have to fave this one nice nice
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
  now this is so much better than the last...this particular style fits you a bit more, i'm thinking.....

it has a draw to it, the exhausted repitition of sound that honestly is a huge chunk of this piece's appeal (yes i know, so very wrong, but oh well)

i believe my favorite part of this is:

"Lo! Death has reared himself a throne
By making weary every bone
And leaving not, unturned, a stone
To sleep postpone, to sleep postpone."
an intriguing stanza

| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
  Neat poem, Sharon! I'm not familiar with the format, but you have executed the poem brilliantly! Insomnia; kinda makes me think of my college days, observing the dawn breaking after being up all night studying after work!
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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