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    dots Submission Name: Insomniadots
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    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1505
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       "Lo! Death has reared himself a throne"
    - Poe, Edgar Allen, 1831, The City in the Sea

    This poem is written using the Monotetra form.


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    dotsInsomniadots
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    In silence, thoughts have taken flight
    Like constellations filling night.
    Conceptions born in mind ignite
    A sleepless plight, a sleepless plight.

    Such restlessness abandons sleep
    By deeming it a pleasure cheap
    As, deep inside, ideas creep
    Within mindís keep, within mindís keep.

    Lo! Death has reared himself a throne
    By making weary every bone
    And leaving not, unturned, a stone
    To sleep postpone, to sleep postpone.

    Whatís that I see upon the lawn
    As hours slip past the telltale yawn?
    First light appears and thoughts are gone
    with break of dawn, with break of dawn.





    Submitted on 2007-02-13 10:48:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this poem! I don't usually leave comments to people, unless something sticks out, I just wrote a poem about the same thing (same title too, I suppose it's a common one) and wanted to read other peoples poems on the same thing. I liked the quotation of Poe, which is a nice synchronicity, as my poem quotes Lennon. I look forward to reading your other works.
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by NoMartyr | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice, very nice. The rhyming was excellent. I thought it was very soothing. I really like it. The last paragraph was beautiful.
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by blue_pixie_dust | [ Reply to This ]
      I usually hate stuff that are taken from parts of other's work..but this one is actually better than Edgar Allen Poe's poem "The City in the Sea"...it's not my style but i enjoyed it and very much liked it..great rhythm, flow, portrayal, and very poetic
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      a pleasure to read, ecxellent rhyming i,ve not heard of it before, but it reads and flows really well. i loved the third stanza, for me it stood out more than the others,yes i think i will have to fave this one nice nice
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      now this is so much better than the last...this particular style fits you a bit more, i'm thinking.....

    it has a draw to it, the exhausted repitition of sound that honestly is a huge chunk of this piece's appeal (yes i know, so very wrong, but oh well)

    i believe my favorite part of this is:

    "Lo! Death has reared himself a throne
    By making weary every bone
    And leaving not, unturned, a stone
    To sleep postpone, to sleep postpone."
    an intriguing stanza

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      Neat poem, Sharon! I'm not familiar with the format, but you have executed the poem brilliantly! Insomnia; kinda makes me think of my college days, observing the dawn breaking after being up all night studying after work!
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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