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    dots Submission Name: See Throughdots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSee Throughdots
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    She slides underneath me,
    Under, over and deep through,
    With eyes of faith,
    And ears the see, too,
    See...I breathe,
    But only if she breathes, too,
    And so that makes me her,
    Mr me. too,
    Only her words,
    Can ever feel true,
    She never tells a lie,
    She even bleeds truth,
    She knows a see, too,
    So she never needs proof,
    She slides underneath me,
    Under, over, and deep through,
    With eyes of faith,
    And a heart that sees, too
    It can never be a lie,
    When she says, "I need you"




    Submitted on 2007-02-13 13:40:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is truely deep and beautiful. I found it flowed together so nicely. I understand these feelings to because I am in a relationship where i feel the same about my boyfriend. I realize this is about your girlfriend but I feel everything in this poem. It was beautiful written. I hope you gave this to her. ;)
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]


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