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    dots Submission Name: Soleildots

    Author: HaldirLives
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 234/149/60
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Inspired by MCR songs, particulary The Black Parade cd. I think of it as a song in my head, but it probably works better as a poem since there's no chorus. Just tell me what you thought of it, how you interpret it, and other such fun things.

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    Decaying, fraying, saying,
    9 months 'til expiration.
    8 months 'til expiration.
    7 months 'til expiration.

    But I can't wait for that day,
    Counting and shouting for help.
    Red Xes on my calendar
    For each pint of blood.
    Take it all this time for me
    And leave me dying of thirst.

    She'll swallow me whole
    Before entropy envelops.
    What a sin this pain is.
    What sin is this pain?
    Soleil, take me whole.
    Can't wait for the bits.

    6 months 'til expiration,
    And I can't keep waiting.
    Parts are falling, spinning off,
    Leaving the pull I feel.
    Soleil, take me whole.
    Can't wait for the bits.

    Lying in bed, impotent and inept,
    5 months 'til expiration date.
    Time is pressing, creeping, waiting
    For my insides to sour.
    I'll take the pieces left,
    And leave you a rouge hole.

    Submitted on 2007-02-13 14:14:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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