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    dots Submission Name: hometowns are exhaustingdots

    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
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    dotshometowns are exhaustingdots

    This town and this road and this world have been tainted by death
    But Iím just a kid with a car and a full tank of gas
    I havenít been gone very long but already Iíve forgotten what itís like
    To live in a place where it all stays the same even though Iíve changed for the better

    Home towns are exhausting

    And this nightmare of mine gets worse with each passing hour
    I swear Iíll bury the corpse of my childhood by this time tomorrow
    But for now Iíll stand on the highway just to watch the sun set
    I can bleed and I can cry and I can scream but I donít want to forget

    Home towns are exhausting

    Some day all of my demons will turn back into stone
    But for now Iíll retreat to the shadows and pretend that I am never alone
    Because the noise in my head matches the rage in my heart
    Itís the sound of it breaking and the sound of it all falling apart

    (Home towns are exhausting)

    I am armed with a knife and a head full of bad memories
    With a mouth full of glass and a past that I canít escape

    Submitted on 2007-02-13 15:43:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      o man i cant agree more. hometowns blow! And
    "this nightmare of mine gets worse with each passing hour
    I swear Iíll bury the corpse of my childhood by this time tomorrow
    But for now Iíll stand on the highway just to watch the sun set
    I can bleed and I can cry and I can scream but I donít want to forget"

    especially the 'ill bury the corpse of my childhood by this time tomorrow', i dont think could be said any better. that uneasy tugging at the pit of your stomach as soon as you cross into your home town. makes me mad/tired/irritated just talking about it.

    you did great at capturing the other side of the specturm where people dont exactly run back home with wide open arms.

    only crit. is the last two lines. they dont seem to fit to me but hey who am i. keep writing.
    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I really love this. It is so easy for me to relate to. The poetry really flows. I think this will make an awesome song. I wish I could hear it put to music. This is a magnificent piece. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]

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