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    dots Submission Name: Everchanging Statedots

    Author: frozenconscienc
    ASL Info:    17/f/md
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 91/55/13
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I haven't done poetry in a while. A looong while. I know what I meant to say, but I look at this and I'm not sure it'll say quite the same thing. Might as well post it anyhow.

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    dotsEverchanging Statedots

    I stand here
    Reaching my hand out
    To a receding shadow
    Following without movement

    Here I stand
    In a state with no name
    I stand here without thought
    Your map is misguiding

    I stand in no place
    To follow a distant shadow
    As the wind passes by
    I'm falling behind

    I stand in a state
    Everchanging under my feet
    the map stares at me
    -You already know where to go

    But there's no easy labels
    No capitol stars or lines
    I have no guide where I stand
    Looking for your shadow

    Submitted on 2007-02-13 15:58:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is beautiful. It makes me feel so sad, and desolate, and longing after something. So, if that's what you intended...good job. If not...well...good job anyway. This is a beautiful piece of work.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]

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