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Author: runedot
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Excerpted from the ‘Younger Days of the Master’

(Younger Days of the Master is a book belonging to a massive saga I call the Pearl Dimensions Saga, it's fairly large... anyways, enjoy!)

Additional Notes: Yes, it is a bit hard to understand, I know, I tried to make it as understandable as possible, however, it is an excerpt, so...

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Shast entered the dimly lit room; he could smell cheap wine in the air.
He had been informed that a Kameu spy resided here, and had come to investigate.
A pale, bulky man entered into the candlelight, from out of the shadows, he wore a rust splotched chain mail, and also carried a broad sword at his side.
“What do you want Yanicheri?” said a gruff voice, who had noticed Shast’s golden armour, the bulky man eyed Shast nervously,
“There is a person here that I wish to meet, she is from Kameu, where is she?” Shast asked,
“Well now, why don’t we talk about that?” said the pale man, rubbing his hands, “Perhaps a Double Silver Keev would jog my memory?”
“Yanicheris don’t bribe, either you will tell me, or you shall be prosecuted,” Shast said,
“Well, if that’s going to be your attitude, I don’t know a thing,” replied the bulky man,
Suddenly a dart whistled out of the shadows, only Shast’s instincts allowed him to go into the Yuguro State, enhancing every second to a minute, and enabling him to dodge the dart,
“You dare attack a Yanicheri?” Shast shouted,
“Yes I dare,” replied a feminine voice,
“Ah, there you are Kameu spy, so nice of you to show up,” Shast said,
A woman wearing a deep red robe with the hood covering her head stepped out of the shadows,
“What is your business here, Kameu?” Shast questioned,
“My business is my own, Yanicheri,” replied the Kameu,
“You will tell me eventually, Kameu,” Shast spoke,
“Only if you are alive to listen!” The Kameu reached into her robe, took out another dart, and threw it once more, Shast dodged easily,
“Attacking a Yanicheri is a foolish thing to do,” Shast said laughing,
Suddenly, as Shast stood there laughing, a dart flew out of the shadows, Shast dodged narrowly; Shast was angry now,
Shast entered into the Yuguro State, and rushed forward, he drew his katana and slashed open the Kameu’s belly, the red blood slowly spewed out, as Shast continued his fury, he cut across the room, halved the pale, bulky man, he then spun around and dealt a blow to the Kameu in the shadows,
Still remaining in the Yuguro State, Shast walked towards the door, he looked behind him at the three dying people in disgust, and left the Yuguro State, the three collapsed, their bodies become fountains of blood,
Shast located a cloth, and wiped his katana clean, he then sheathed it, and left the dimly lit room.

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