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Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 46
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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Every step I take
Away from my mistake
Is more painful than the last
Trying to fade out my past
Hoping this sadness and emptiness
Will turn into happiness
But a circle is round
Round and Round
Down and Down
Heading straight for the ground

Submitted on 2007-02-13 16:42:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ah, the familiar feelings of being in a whirlpool trapped. life sucks, and you have a very clever way of interpreting that depth of emotion some call hopelessness or depression and, in a very short space, transfering it to genuine thought and recievable wording. you do so much in so short a space, but especially the line
"Every step I take
Away from my mistake
Is more painful than the last" really hit me. the only minor alteration i would make would be to take out the word happiness as it is overused and rawly undefined. thanks for sharing
| Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by ryeker03 | [ Reply to This ]

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