Escape

Author: MysterydarkPoet ASL Info:    20/f/Aust Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173 Words: 46

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Escape

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Every step I take Away from my mistake Is more painful than the last Trying to fade out my past Hoping this sadness and emptiness Will turn into happiness But a circle is round Round and Round Down and Down Heading straight for the ground

Submitted on 2007-02-13 16:42:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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ah, the familiar feelings of being in a whirlpool trapped. life sucks, and you have a very clever way of interpreting that depth of emotion some call hopelessness or depression and, in a very short space, transfering it to genuine thought and recievable wording. you do so much in so short a space, but especially the line "Every step I take Away from my mistake Is more painful than the last" really hit me. the only minor alteration i would make would be to take out the word happiness as it is overused and rawly undefined. thanks for sharing ryeker

| Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by ryeker03 | [ Reply to This ]

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