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The Birth of a New World

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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The Birth of a New World

R.I.P to the music & the love
R.I.P to the belief in the above
R.I.P to our final happy day
R.I.P to a world we threw away

Farewell to the friendship and bonding
Welcome to the lies & the absconding
Welcome to the revenge & the cheating
Welcome to the murder & the decieving

Congragulations on the world we've made
The death of peace is the price we've paid
War and hate is what we've created
The happiness and peace we should've savored

Submitted on 2007-02-13 16:47:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is so very true
You dfid an excellent job with this one
I for one believe Hell is man made negativity
I dont believe in a place perse as hell
I however know as a fact there is a Heaven and a God
This is a write that would have been perfect at the dawn of time when man decided to make the World what he thought it should be instead of what The Good Lord created it for
Excellent Job
I am making this a favorite as your speaking the same message I try to get out in almost all of my writes
We have to wake up and fix the problems we have created before it is to late and the World and Life as we know it disapeers forever
God Bless

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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