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    dots Submission Name: How the Genius Diesdots

    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 303/257/83
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHow the Genius Diesdots

    The man who tried to figure out his own hand
    Had restless nights, his days filled with enigmatic demands
    He contemplated life's constant scams,
    But still faced strife with his sturdy stands

    Simple inaccuracies tickled his mind
    He explored answers to questions that he couldn't find
    He stared at the wall, which he stood behind
    And wondered what more of this simple confine

    Nothing in a place so dull in its right
    Could make him feel whole, or make him see light
    He battled with theories in his perceptual sights
    What purpose he served in a life and death fight

    Not days but years this man he stared
    Out into the vastness of the masses declared
    And pondered and wondered what more he could bare
    Of an effortless time he knew all he could share

    With the rest of the world, his final dare
    Was to end his life as his own ashes flared
    And diminished his nothingness out into the nothingness of air

    Submitted on 2007-02-13 20:22:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this reminds me of a friend of mine.... thanks i haven't though about him in a long time... also it was very good!!!
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by yamifox | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, and it's inspired me to write something. :) So thanks a bunch. I've been having a nasty bit of WB for ages now.

    ~Sicobe R. Crow
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      this piece lost me...i am sure the idea was quite spiffy to beginwith, but it ended up a bit wordy and dull, just sort of losing steam and winding down with each succeeding line and ;leaving me wanting to reach the end....perhaps i just dont have patience, but i just dont care for this piece...

    too wordy, not enough emotion and life to it
    do keep trying tho, you obviously have some good ideas...

    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]
      i cannot fully comment right now because it is still sinking in..yet i do have to say it is a very orginal piece. it reminds me of something i read awhile back about how God's only real challenge and intrest would be to destory his own self for it would be the only thing he would not be able to see beyond. sounds odd but i assure the author explains it much better.

    i do have one question though. is it that the man gave up because it seemed his only choice or mainly just because it drove him mad?

    all in all good work, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interersting spin off a simple fact. I liked the creativity in this.. you have very presented very clear pictures of the inner-workings of a man thinking so much he drives himself crazy. Good job.
    | Posted on 2007-02-13 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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