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    dots Submission Name: Chemical Reactiondots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote this after reading "unpolished apathy" by mixedemotions00.

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    dotsChemical Reactiondots

    When you left
    achemical reaction
    turned my love for you
    into anger, sadness, and disdain.

    Submitted on 2004-06-07 06:17:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A perfect title for this poem. Few synonyms for anger after a feeling you thought would last a life time, then they leave and presto a chemical reation. Really fantastic.
    | Posted on 2004-06-12 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this has its own credibility in the fact that our reactions to almost anything are fueled by a chemical reaction within our bodies.... kind of like when stress takes its course and can actually change your attitudes, your looks, etc... this piece is really good and very short... nice to see your style again... been away too long... not much time to spend here but I try
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Crash | [ Reply to This ]
      The chemical reaction is not an analogy or a metaphor or anything like that. It's a fickin' fact of nature. All you flower thumpers give me a chemical reaction that fills me with anger, sadness and disdain.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      You know I understand this feeling, and I think the chemical reaction is a good analogy, because at that moment when it hits you, your face heats up, maybe in anger or rage, maybe in embarassment for feeling so stupid to ever have believed. It's the old fight or flight beastial emotion, and it is very much a chemical reaction.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      On the other hand, it's sort of a nice, peeled back to the essence observation with greater poignancy and grasp on reality than any of your other work.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds more like one sentence from a bio-chemist's introspective journal entry than poetry. This sight is so full of cuddle lovers that she's going to start losing sight of her own talent.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      what are these people saying...expand...nono..its just right..perfect ...i red the poem that inspired this one just so i knew where you were coming from when you wrote this..you were able toexplain somuch in four lines and thats why its perfect...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      a nice little thought, short and to the point. I like it. but maybe you could expand it a bit. seems a little bit too short but that's just me.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      whenever i read your work... its like i'm looking at the Mona Lisa... there is so much hidden beneath the smile and the simplicity. girl, you never fail to impress me.
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      OOOOOH, dig the Av, it's Groovy!

    Coooool lol

    I like this poem too... anger, sadness and disdain.. that has the same resounding ring to it as Faith, Hope and Charity, or Love, Hate, Tragedy... you done good. Sweet litty ditty :)
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all, thanks for the comments on "unpolished apathy"-- I'm glad it inspired you to write this!

    I like this... it brings the emotional world in touch with the reality. It's... I don't know. I can't get my thoughts into words, but it's really good. Like Leahrah said, quite a sweet little ditty. :)
    | Posted on 2004-06-07 00:00:00 | by mixedemotions00 | [ Reply to This ]

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