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Author:	kase
ASL Info:	19/M/Winnipeg
Elite Ratio:	2.28 - 79/226/142
Words:	131

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
Total Views:	194
Average Vote:	4.5000
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MY VALENTINES POEM BY KASE dots

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she wears such lingerie, while drinking her red wine
among the other customs celebrating valentines
she blows such sweet kisses, pouting her thickened lips
her body sways in all directions by the movement of her hips

im staring at her in the eyes, her softened greenish greys
actions so erotic that my heart and mind both crave
instinctively she wraps herself gently around my waist
moving in a little closer so that i can have a taste

her tongue is moist, as it slightly grazes behind my ear and down my neck
forever playing foreplay as a substitute for sex
she looks me directly in my eyes and gives me a little peck
and after all of that arousal, she asks me for her cheque

what a bitch.....

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  it was nicely done
| Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
  I somehow missed this poem....I loved it it had such an errotic feel then the ending made me laugh so hard my co workers thought i had finally lost it, and i agree.....what a [censored] <haha>

AL
| Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
  This well written like all or other works a lil choppy in some areas but it work out perfectly fine.

"her tongue is moist, as it slightly grazes behind my ear and down my neck
forever playing foreplay as a substitute for sex
she looks me directly in my eyes and gives me a little peck
and after all of that arousal, she asks me for her cheque

what a [censored]....."

That was my fave part of the piece expect a sweet ending but it wasn't at least for da guy.

well hope to hear from ya and keep up the good work..

Lil'Mix
| Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  This well written like all or other works a lil choppy in some areas but it work out perfectly fine.

"her tongue is moist, as it slightly grazes behind my ear and down my neck
forever playing foreplay as a substitute for sex
she looks me directly in my eyes and gives me a little peck
and after all of that arousal, she asks me for her cheque

what a [censored]....."

That was my fave part of the piece expect a sweet ending but it wasn't at least for da guy.

well hope to hear from ya and keep up the good work..

Lil'Mix
| Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  This well written like all or other works a lil choppy in some areas but it work out perfectly fine.

"her tongue is moist, as it slightly grazes behind my ear and down my neck
forever playing foreplay as a substitute for sex
she looks me directly in my eyes and gives me a little peck
and after all of that arousal, she asks me for her cheque

what a [censored]....."

That was my fave part of the piece expect a sweet ending but it wasn't at least for da guy.

well hope to hear from ya and keep up the good work..

Lil'Mix
| Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
  well then.....i was really enjoying it, beginning to slip into the speaker's place and you set it up quite perfectly and then the ending was a completely original surprise and totally unexpected.....not something easily done these days...

also its easy to read and entertaining as well as having a defined style and flow that is anything but juvenile...

spiffy
xoxo
| Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]

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