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    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 505
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 642



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       ....i don't really know what to say...


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    look at you
    patheticly on the floor crying
    all heartbroken again
    and you feel like dying
    these tears...
    won't help any at all
    they won't bring her back
    SHE let YOU fall
    she never cared
    you were just another stranger
    no matter how much love you had
    it was never there in her heart
    you dilute memories
    but they find a way back
    the more you run...
    the higher they stack
    you should turn
    from the past
    and kill her from the memories
    and you better kill her fast...

    forget it, its too late




    Submitted on 2007-02-14 16:23:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      not very good rhyming.."you just another stranger", should it be your.....instead of you?....if you can get it to rhyme, it will be great....

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      ah.
    this has a horrible rhyme scheme, but it has a good theme.

    It has potential to be better
    | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by itsjustme22 | [ Reply to This ]


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