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    dots Submission Name: what it feels like for your heart to stop beatingdots
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    Author: social circus
    ASL Info:    16/M/LA
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 17/57/36
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 586
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 869



    Description:
       this is another writing i deleted but then put back up because i like it again


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    dotswhat it feels like for your heart to stop beatingdots
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    i feel like ive been thrown aside
    i think its better if i died
    my hate is the key
    my mom doesnt even want me
    it feels like ive lived it tough
    but now im just a lonely fuck up
    i cant wait to see my life when im older
    politcs, addict, fema, weed roller
    the lists are all the same
    no one but me to blame
    fuck the cause play my game
    screw you world as youve screwed me
    when i die hell is where im to be
    i dont care about this shit anymore
    when im a man my funds will be with a drug lord
    go back to the childhood i had
    and fuck the cover up about drugs are bad
    give me that weed and give me that needle
    fuck your church and fuck your steeple
    you can tell me im a screw up
    im a social circus and i dont even give a fuck





    Submitted on 2007-02-14 19:21:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This makes me laugh. Death is EVERYONE'S eventual fate. Wether they are great, or not. Everyone is thrown aside in time. Everyone will eventually be forgotten and rotten away. Turned to dust. But to do nothing with one's life is simply a way of cowardice. To simply go and cry is a worthless endeavor. However, to live what you feel is right, and to do the best that you can, would make you more than just part of a man. If you hate the world as i do, you can join me. Become a blacksmith and a bowyer. Make weapons of death in which everyone may spread how they feel. As for your poem. I liked it. i think that the rant whiney style of it gave it more power. It is slightly disorganized, but it adds to it. enjoy
    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by Shiboo-sama | [ Reply to This ]
      loved it...that's all i can say...or all i need to say....
    -alexis-
    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by darkwiccan14 | [ Reply to This ]


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