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    dots Submission Name: Lost Girls Questionsdots
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    Author: Thornful Rose
    ASL Info:    23-female-California
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 141/186/49
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       A lost girls questions.


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    dotsLost Girls Questionsdots
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    I was just wondering,
    May I empty out my heart?
    I have all these unanswered questions,
    And could really use your help.
    It will just take a moment,
    a second of your life.
    To put into perspective,
    The world through others eyes.

    What is a new begining,
    without finding an old end?
    Does it really start over,
    or just re-begins?
    Where am I now,
    and where was I then?
    Will I ever be happy,
    if so, then when?
    Is it normal to be crazy,
    or strange to be sane?
    I know I truly love him,
    does he really feel the same?
    How will I end up,
    hopefully, without shame.
    Do I ever settle down,
    leaving behind all my games?
    Am I to smart to be hopeful,
    or just to dumb to be optimistic?
    What I really want to know,
    Have my hopes and wishes been realistic?
    Does everyone hate someone,
    and not really care for other people?
    Or am I the only one,
    who only see's in them the evil?
    Can I honestly be anything I want,
    Or have I already made to many mistakes?
    Can I please be allowed to suceed,
    I'll do whatever it takes?

    So do you have a view,
    one way or another?
    Is my being lost typical,
    just because I lost my mother?
    Thank you for your feelings,
    and thinking enough of me to read this.
    But more than anything thanks,
    for taking time to feel this.






    Submitted on 2007-02-15 03:42:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh Sweetheart. This one just tugs at my soul. I can't remember how many times I have asked those question myself. I can also just hear my daughters asking me those same questions.

    I could hear the sadness and longing in your poem and if I can do anything to help, please feel free to email me. andreaboyungs@yahoo.com.

    Good job on the poem and keep writing. It has always been an outlet for me. Blessed Be Andrea
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ]
      I definately can feel the lonliness you feel and the deep pain you feel inside
    As you have suggested in your right
    I can tell your Mothers death has deeply affected you
    My Mother is my best Friend in the World and I would be incredibly Lost without her
    HOWEVER
    I hope you realize your Mother lives on in Your Heart and is eager to help you move forward
    All you have to do is go to Your Heart and ask her for Her Help
    I guarantee you she will be more then eager to help you
    I will be Praying for you and your Mother
    If you ever need someone to talk to Please feel Free to PM me
    I Promise I will answer
    God Bless
    Ron

    By the way I have been told my writes are very Uplifting
    If you would like Please take a look and let me know what you think
    Hopefully they will help you feel better
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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