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    dots Submission Name: The Ghost Of Piratesdots
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    Author: Vibiesh
    Elite Ratio:    0.23 - 0/1/2
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
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    dotsThe Ghost Of Piratesdots
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    When the shadows grow and the storms arrive,
    When the sea is covered with ghostly mist,
    Beware those pirates whilst your breath exist,
    'cause it's the time those devils come alive.

    They come in a haunted ship colored ill;
    Their nails are long and their smiles are evil;
    Their tongues are thirsty to taste your fresh blood,
    'cause they are so pale as though they were dead.

    Whisper not a word when their steps are near,
    Fill your heart with prayers for mercy with fear;
    'cause there's no hope to stand against their way,
    Neither now nor before to save your day.

    So behold my children, never be there
    'cause those pirates may come from anywhere




    Submitted on 2007-02-15 04:20:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A fine sonnet (for that is exactly what it is) the first stanza was strikingly good ... I wish more folks would write sonnets, however, it is like crack cocaine--highly, highly addictive! Beware! Very fine poem ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ...
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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