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    dots Submission Name: Goodbyedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Story/Love
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       Realization to all that has happend is not easy but its part of growing up ... it shows who you really are....


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    dotsGoodbyedots
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    Times have changed...
    We've, grown up...
    Or so I say, grown apart..
    Or at least my feelings have grown away from you.
    And I've pushed you too far this time..
    And there you go!
    In our green cavlier..
    Goodbye, I wisper.. as the snow blows through my hair.
    And a tear rolls down my cheek
    As its been said... "I've saw the end, before it begun"
    Think back my friend, my lover, my ... my Man..
    We can agree on at least that...
    It was over before it began, we had our doubts and nothing got rid of them...
    Nothing
    Sigh, whats there to say...
    Whats there to do now?
    "Re-build" what was stable
    Stable..?? What is that...
    Its not going to be the same.
    But Its another hurdle to jump
    Another rough road ahead of myself..
    I can't say why it is the way it is...
    All I can do is tell you how I feel
    Explain what I believe is the truth...
    Sigh, and go from there..
    And I suppose now is when
    We say "our" goodbye's
    So here it goes...
    Goodbye My Good friend...
    Goodbye My lover
    Goodbye to all the good times..
    Goodbye to all the hard times...
    Goodbye My Friend...
    You'll Always have a place in my heart






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    | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by medusa | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done. (Just note the misspelling on line 8, it should be "whisper") But I really liked it, maybe you could go more into more detail about the green cavlier, but otherwise I really liked it! It kind of reminds me of that James Blunt song "Goodbye My Lover", but yeah, growing up does suck sometimes, you think that on a cloudy day how you wish it were sunny, and then it rains... beet keep your head up!

    Keep up the great work and keep writing,
    *~ Mist ~*
    | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by PrincessDoom13 | [ Reply to This ]


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