Blood, So Much Blood ! Where's The Wound ?
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this piece is dedicated to silently suffering love.
Blood, So Much Blood ! Where's The Wound ?
Oh Lord ! What was that place ! Alone I was in an octagonal hall All surrounded by empty corridors In front of me a gigantic statue stood With a handsome face,serene expression Exuding unmatched peace...ashen eyes His long , curly hair covered the shoulders ......a dense mass of small spirals. Who could surpass him in grandeur ? Every moment I saw a new beauty in him And thought I had met him before.. Perhaps in a dream...... Perhaps in a previous birth... And he called me back to his tomb. Suddenly, I felt, earth violently shook I had to run through secret royal chambers Stumbling madly on queens' baths Through the sprawling ruins of Crashing wealth , power and art... And,yes, I had seen before fainting Those gothic arches collapsing on me... Here I lie unharmed, uninjured Surrounded by concerned sisters Who report with smiling relief That a curly-haired mysterious... Serene and eminent looking man Brought me back from death's imminent grasp. Speak they while removing blood-stains From my face , arms and hands And urge me to change my Blood-soaked clothes if I feel fine. "Blood, so much blood !" I inquire "where is the wound...." "Wounds are all his" comes the reply "and blood is all his....." " It was he who profusely bled..." |
Submitted on 2007-02-15 05:06:06 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| WOW! now that was a great story!!! I love how she ran and rad and the description of everything as she ran was wonderful! The ending capped it off perfect. Great write!!! Thanks for sharing. Kelley Frost | Posted on 2007-11-28 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ] | Parul, this is powerful and amazing! The story of you, overcome by love, and he, wounded by love! | Kahlil Gibram wrote in "The Prophet" "For even as love crowns you so shall he crucify you. Even as he is for your growth, so is he for your pruning"! This is a beautiful and enveloping prose poem about Love! Well done! Bravo! | Posted on 2007-06-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ] | Wow, this is probably the most original Christian poem I've ever read. If I'm correct and the part about "him" bleeding being Jesus Christ, then I appreciate the subtlety and the angle you came at it with. | If not, then I have no idea what this is about. | Posted on 2007-03-08 00:00:00 | by Lilith Tolsky | [ Reply to This ] | I loved this! Usually I don't get into gothic writes, but this pulled my interest in with the title and I can say I wasn't disappointed. Definetly going on my favorites. | ~Poetic Tragedy | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by poetic_tragedy | [ Reply to This ] | A surprising touch, your choice of words. I'm trying hard to compare it to something but it slips out of my grasp every time. It seems like a little bit of intrigue, a bit of our good old fantasy and even some psychological undertone to go with the inner dialogue of this central character that dominates through the poem. Of course, the slightly macabre and intentionaly darker atmosphere is hard to miss and it fits this piece perfectly. What surprises me to no end is this fierce attention to the details. You're extreemly good at those. Impressive. | | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ] | This is a beautiful write, don't mind if i ad it to my favorites |  | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ] | |
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