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    dots Submission Name: Trappeddots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    18/F/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.86 - 252/248/195
    Words: 340
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 291
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2040



    Description:
       This is just about my identity being taken away because SOMEONE (my mother) doesn't like who i am.


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    dotsTrappeddots
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    Stuck in a spinning room
    I'm stuck inside.
    Lost in my spinning head
    where all my troubles lie.
    I can't find out what's wrong with me.
    She's trying to change me from who I want to be.
    Trapped inside the body of a 16 year old
    But my mind is somewhere else
    can someone please help me.

    I'm stuck in a world where no one can accept me.
    I'm lost, I'm stuck, I'm trapped in this place just let me be.
    I'm not like you or anyone else.
    I am lost, I am stuck, I am trapped in this place.

    Old pictures on the wall,
    I remember who I used to be.
    Looking back that's the way
    they all liked me, but
    I can't find out what's wrong with me.
    She's trying to change me from who I want to be.
    Trapped inside the body of a 16 year old
    But my mind is somewhere else
    can someone please help me.

    I'm stuck in a world where no one can accept me.
    I'm lost, I'm stuck, I'm trapped in this place just let me be.
    I'm not like you or anyone else.
    I am lost, I am stuck, I am trapped in this place.

    Can you help em before I lose myself
    She can't stand who I am
    Who i want to be.
    Can you help em before I lose myself
    She can't stand who I am
    Who i want to be.
    I can't find out what's wrong with me.
    She's trying to change me from who I want to be.
    Trapped inside the body of a 16 year old
    But my mind is somewhere else
    can someone please help me.

    I'm stuck in a world where no one can accept me.
    I'm lost, I'm stuck, I'm trapped in this place just let me be.
    I'm not like you or anyone else.
    I am lost, I am stuck, I am trapped in this place.
    Can someone please help me?
    Can someone please help me?




    Submitted on 2007-02-15 11:01:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one's just really too repetative, I think. The lines just aren't interesting enough to be repeated. I'm not sure what to say to make it better. I'd try some metaphor or something to show more of the frustration.

    Also, a little typo, you have "Can you help em before I lose myself" in there twice.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by freshcookies | [ Reply to This ]


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