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dream


Author: Sanjhana
ASL Info:    21/f/India
Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 118 /154 /45
Words: 46
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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dream



the dream i had
was of you.
but in the dream
you loved me.

you loved me
the way i love you.
the way
i should be loved.

the dream i had
was beautiful.
but that dream
was just that... a dream.




Submitted on 2007-02-15 11:43:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  nice, i like this, but in the future you may wanna capitalize the title and your first words just so it stands out more. ^_^
| Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by Midnight Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  Sanghana

We all have that dream
But in reality its a dream showing us the way to happiness
Follow that dream and you will find the real person you want and you will know him when he is for real

By the way this is the first comment I have given personally

I felt I should respond since you gave such thoughtful words on my poem

KEEP THE SPIRIT

Karen
| Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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