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heavens cry hard tears from the sky they wash away my sins flash of light even amidst the fright brings some joyous colour a rumbling roar then there's more awakens my soul from slumber |
Submitted on 2007-02-15 12:16:11 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Hey Sanjhana, I did like reading this, your poem........"Rain"...it is short and sweet ..........this rhyme scheme does have a charm of its own. You have put these thoughts down well in words ........... quite unique and dramatic. It is good that you have managed to squeese in some alliteration too........ The last verse was what I liked best of the three verses : "a rumbling roar then there's more awakens my soul from slumber" 'rumbling' and roar' 'then' and 'there's' 'soul' and 'slumber' Good work. | Posted on 2007-12-14 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ] | Watch out awakened souls wreak their own storms before the calm comes!!! Enjoyed the read...light and easy yet captured the essense of being awakened by a storm. Also offers a deeper read to me | xxxx | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ] | Watch out awakened souls wreak their own storms before the calm comes!!! Enjoyed the read...light and easy yet captured the essense of being awakened by a storm. Also offers a deeper read to me | xxxx | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ] | I love it. The begginning was a little bit rocky for me, like I didnt know if it was a merely physical or emotional poem. But in the end it had grown into something much more emotional. I really liked the last stanza. Keep up the good work! | -Randee | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ] | Beautiful! | What more can a person say? Just beautiful. Ooooo...if you read it and take out the words "the, and" and "which" from it, its just as cool. Ooooo...do that and then read it from bottom too top. Cool stuff, thanks for sharing. | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ] | Merry Meet Sanjhana. This is an awesome poem. It's short but says alot. My favorite stanza Is the second. I hope to see more of you. Blessed Be Andrea | | Posted on 2007-02-15 00:00:00 | by magickandie | [ Reply to This ] | |
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