yeah, reminded me of one of those chants witches say in a show like charmed or something. this was very interesting. made me smile and want to share this piece to some people i know who want revenge on their exes. lol. anyway, seriously, this flowed very well. emotion was clear and so were your intentions, haha. i dont usually like poems like this, but i have to say this one was pretty clever. the only criticism i have is that the rhyme of the second to the last stanza is a bit off. but aside from that, this was nice
Ohh this write is Good
You are showing someone that you are aware of their evil intentions in this write
You were able to create quite a vivid explanation of your emotions with this write
I really liked the rhyme scheme used in this as you can really capture your emotion better with your thoughts written in this style
Excellent work!!!
God Bless
Ron
Please if you get a chance Please take a look at my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
Ahh that kind of reminds me of those horror movies where the guy cheats on the girl and the girl looks for revenge. Then she finds him and runs him over with her car multiple times until he dies. Lol. Overall I think it could used a little work. I'm not sure what kind of feedback you are looking for so I'm not going to sit here and write out word for word how you should change it. Ummm...I like how when I read it I feel it just keeps getting louder in my head (if that makes any sense). I guess it just gets the message of the poem out. Oh wells I love angry poems! Nice work:)
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