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Submission Name:
Awake
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Author:
the_truth
ASL Info:
15/f/usa
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3.87 - 25/21/21
Words:
175
Class/Type:
Poetry/Depressed
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please awake for me my dear....
Awake
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14 of February 2007
Awake
You’ve been asleep for so long
Numb to the world before you
Were you here all along
What did you pursue
I need you to open your eyes
To see what you have missed all this time
Don’t clutch on to all those ignorant lies
This is not a victimless crime
You are guiltily of not awaking
Hiding from the truth
A fear of forsaking
The tenderness of your youth
Forgive me if I slip away this day
I cannot be your support
You will be here no matter what comes of they
I never wanted to let you stray
Please my dear awake
Come to see what you have missed
This is for the forsaken
If you do not I shall not persist
Just know the longer you sleep
The farther you will drift
Leaving behind a loss-but non shall weep
Awaken now and appreciate your ‘gift.’
Submitted on 2007-02-15 23:27:59
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Good rhyming. It's always so hard..atleast for me, to find good rhyming words, but you seemed to do it well. Escpecially in these lines:
"You are guiltily of not awaking
Hiding from the truth
A fear of forsaking
The tenderness of your youth "
Very good.
-Jamie
| Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by
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