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    dots Submission Name: Awakedots
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    Author: the_truth
    ASL Info:    15/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 25/21/21
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 192
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       please awake for me my dear....


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    dotsAwakedots
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    14 of February 2007


    Awake

    You’ve been asleep for so long
    Numb to the world before you
    Were you here all along
    What did you pursue

    I need you to open your eyes
    To see what you have missed all this time
    Don’t clutch on to all those ignorant lies
    This is not a victimless crime

    You are guiltily of not awaking
    Hiding from the truth
    A fear of forsaking
    The tenderness of your youth

    Forgive me if I slip away this day
    I cannot be your support
    You will be here no matter what comes of they
    I never wanted to let you stray

    Please my dear awake
    Come to see what you have missed
    This is for the forsaken
    If you do not I shall not persist

    Just know the longer you sleep
    The farther you will drift
    Leaving behind a loss-but non shall weep
    Awaken now and appreciate your ‘gift.’









    Submitted on 2007-02-15 23:27:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Good rhyming. It's always so hard..atleast for me, to find good rhyming words, but you seemed to do it well. Escpecially in these lines:
    "You are guiltily of not awaking
    Hiding from the truth
    A fear of forsaking
    The tenderness of your youth "

    Very good.

    -Jamie
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by blue_pixie_dust | [ Reply to This ]



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