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    dots Submission Name: Fear Baladedots
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    Author: Porcelaine
    ASL Info:    27/F/Croatia
    Elite Ratio:    3.9 - 880/703/256
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 835
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 989



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       I have nothing to say for myself. It's playful, it's disturbing, it's sick. Quite like me someone might suggest.


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    dotsFear Baladedots
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    Tempt me, rake me, ill forsake me
    Blossoms in your lovely mind
    Shake me, make me make you bleed
    When awake a scream you find
    Gasp and vanish, run to me
    Poisoned, hungry, feed on me
    Cold and wet, break in a sweat
    I am always there for you, I smile

    Twist and turn and make me me burn
    Lovely how a panic writhes
    Nesting in between your lies
    Lady darkness might be blind
    Chase you chase me, find a door
    Trick you trick me, run some more
    Open wide and hold your grip
    Ready, don't forget to trip

    Nasty, evil, naughty monster
    Darling would you pet the beast
    Better yet before it's feast
    Happy thoughts won't help at all
    Leave no time to take your doll
    Playtime over, grab a breath
    Won't you meet with Lady Death
    Come on now, don't you be shy

    Fear has been too kind on you




    Submitted on 2007-02-16 01:21:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mind motives 8->... The psychotic dilemma of an emotional tornmented mind... The "crazy dark creature" watching from the deep and frozen corners of your spirit... That brings back memories... these "obsession vibes" :)

    What will it be? Angel or Demon?
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      Its been far to long away from this site. I miss the talent! Your poem brings chill to my skin, your word will bring nightmares!(smile) I love this write and you are so talented!!! Thanks for sharring.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2007-02-21 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Potent stuff and very finely done with some excellent rhyme and meter...a tad different than your usualy fare, however, it is still you, the silken, sly, sultry sorceress of words....bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, then... Hard to say what kind of opinion I have on this one; it is disturbing, flirtatious, painful, and slightly demonic all at once. How do I comment on something that doesn't want to sit still long enough to allow an opinion to coalesce...?

    Sunday...Why did it have to be Sunday? I'm still thawing from that snowdrift I fell into (I thought it was a hill.). Anyhow.

    --crimson echo
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by crimson echo | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved this, i thought the rhyming and flow were great, very fast paced and exciting, i had visions of a wild eyed girl, chanting taunting and teasin gher lover victim. different from your other writings, veryenjoyable
    gerry
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by bogeyman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this verse reads like "frolicking with death as a playmate"! This verse has your characteristic brialliance with form, and is breathtaking in it's action and subject! Awesome, as always, dear Porcelaine!
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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