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    dots Submission Name: Darkness Drugs, and Alcoholdots

    Author: I_m not Broken
    ASL Info:    17/F/IDK
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 91/98/68
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       My cheating boyrfriend got me into a lot of bad shit. and i tried to kill myself when he took my 14 years old, best friends, virginity, on valentines day. ^_^ how sweet yea? Thats what this is about.

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    dotsDarkness Drugs, and Alcoholdots

    Searching for a truth
    Any reason to justify
    What they said as true
    Yet I'm running in circles
    Everywhere I search I find
    Darkness Drugs and Alcohol
    Falling from their graces
    Yet I just don't give a fuck anymore
    I'll lie in his arms tonight
    Stoned or drunk I'll smile
    This brings me happiness
    Darness drugs and alcohol
    How many times have I done this
    to myself?
    Do I care anymore?
    Hes lying with her tonight
    I'm in a pathetic denial
    A voice whispers, screaming to me
    Darkness drugs and alcohol
    Leave me stranded forgotten abonded
    Yet i'm still stretching out for his hand
    He glows in the darkness....
    I don't see her right behind him
    Smiling wickedly as she watches me dying
    Darkenss Drugs and Alcohol
    A pool of blood a stained knife in hand
    Hes running to me now, a fading memory
    Darling your pleas to your god are just to late
    Begging him not to take me won't stop this pain
    And i can see her next to you...
    My best friend smiling, she gave me my last dose of
    Darkness drugs and alcohol

    Submitted on 2007-02-16 10:10:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think most have us have been at the point during a point in our lives... where we think nothing will ever get better. I recently got into some stuff i shouldn't have after my girlfriend of 3 years left me for a friend i had had for about 6 years.. it was just a horrible situation but things always get better. Enough about my personal life. Good write one comment though, the second time you repeat "Darkness Drugs and Alcohol" you wrote "Darness" just a little typo but i thought i'd let you know. Keep writing

    J. Ackson Jr.
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, reading your poem took me back to a nasty spot in my life too when I was 18. Is he your first love? That's how it happened for me, and I couldn't believe my world would ever knit itself back together after the agony of betrayal, but I'm 26 now, and grateful that I had those experiences so that it helped me decide what I would and wouldn't allow in my life again. It feels like it will hurt forever, and no one can lessen it for you, but hang in there.
    The last half of the poem is the most effective I think. My particular favorite set of lines is "he glows in the darkness... I don't see her right behind him". It's like that, where the objects of our love seem like beacons, and we're oblivious to everything but them.
    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by jramatique | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this was a real kick in the teeth for you and i'm sorry you got betrayed by those you cared the most for, but, it's happened to me my whole life so i understand how you feel. your words were very accurate here and it will make good sense to anyone who has ever attempted suicide. it was clear and right to the point and a good write with really good imagery! read my stuff, i've been where you are! it's not the end of the world, it's the beginning of a new world for you...so you take heart :)
    keep writing!!!!!


    | Posted on 2007-02-16 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]

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