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    Author: babygirl09
    ASL Info:    21/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 69/63/49
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 870
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 499



    Description:
       i kinda put this one together as i was goin, i'm really confused right now and it's really hard for me to figure out what i need to do with my life...


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    tears are falling
    all down my face
    tears are falling
    all over the place
    my heart is bleeding
    nothing but black
    my life is nothing
    since you've turned your back
    this razor is gettin old
    and i'm gettin tired of fighting
    the same old thing
    time after time
    it's all too much for me
    i can't hold it in anymore
    i have no heart left
    since you walked out
    of my door




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    ||| Comments |||
      Its A Great Poem It Reads Well
    I Think Alot Of People Can Relate To This I Know I Can To A Certain Extent And Sometimes It Feels Like There Is Nothing Else Left NFor You In This World So You Turn To Give up But Remember That Every Action has A Reaction
    Keep up The Great Writing Cant Wait To Read More
    xXx *Mwah* Luv Stacey
    | Posted on 2007-02-20 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your flow and the way you put your words togetha but i think making it a bit longer would have helped to convey the emotion that i think you wre trying to put out there...
    | Posted on 2007-02-17 00:00:00 | by phsycoticangel | [ Reply to This ]


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