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    dots Submission Name: Sugar, Spice and Everything Nicedots
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    Author: Lisa Milligan
    ASL Info:    48/F/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.71 - 38/47/21
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Prose/
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    dotsSugar, Spice and Everything Nicedots
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    “You must understand, your behavior is hurting your children.”
    I sat confused, expecting the psychiatrist to blame me
    the trouble making teenager, the problem in the family
    but he was directing his comments at my mother

    Back at home in my room
    I could feel my father as he walked in
    and threw a piece of paper next to me on the bed
    “Maybe it would be better for all of you if I were gone…”
    written in my mother’s hand
    panic overwhelmed me
    I turned to my father in horror
    he was leaning against my doorway
    with an accusing, but sarcastic look on his face
    I flew upstairs from my bedroom to theirs
    to find her lying very still in her bed

    “Mom, Mom!”
    I shook her shoulders insistently
    groggily she awoke for a moment
    “What is it?”
    as my terror cleared
    I noticed the mostly empty bottle of wine on the bedside table

    She hadn’t killed herself
    she’d passed out
    and there was Dad
    again leaning against a bedroom doorway
    a nasty smile on his face
    and I realized
    my father wanted me to believe she'd committed suicide

    and it was all my fault




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