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RainDrops


Author: BleedingTears
ASL Info:    16/f/Neverland
Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 418 /289 /62
Words: 99
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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i was in some kind of dreamland, i guess.


RainDrops



We ran into puddles in the pouring rain.
We sang at the top of our lungs.
We slept 'till twilight and waited for dawn.
The sky turned gray, coated with silver-lined clouds.
We stared and waited for these raindrops to shower upon us.
Instead mist blew into our faces
Causing giggles, causing butterflies to flutter.
And the raindrops fall upon us.
We ran into puddles in the pouring rain.
We sang at the top of our lungs.
You grabbed a hold of my hand,
Took me to a place where I could see the sky,
hiding from the raindrops.




Submitted on 2007-02-16 20:09:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice pic, I like your work. I like poems about the rain. Only because I have yet to write one.
The romantic flavor is a nice touch too.
I like what I read, when I read what you write.

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2007-08-22 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a beautiful romantic piece, the sense of warmth despite the surroundings is overwhelming. Great job.
| Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by SuperEdgar | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a beautiful expression of emotion and very well written love the pic on this one as well.
You are very talented and I like your work alot, Keep up the wonderful writing.
| Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
  ah...sweet young innocent love under raindrops.
*sniff*
| Posted on 2007-04-08 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really well done. I like the tone here, the fondness of memories, and hint of love budding in the rain. Deft touch with this and well done.

Peace, love and all that other junk,

Joe
| Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
  hehe i have song titled rain drops
but mine refers to tears...
but anyways i like this writing
entry you really put your mind to the test

<3 lelian
| Posted on 2007-03-10 00:00:00 | by Lelian Marie | [ Reply to This ]
  P.S. - i added this one to my favorites
| Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow i really like this piece... and wait... is it true... it doesn't remind me of any of my writing! lol good work
| Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]


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