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    dots Submission Name: To the Makers of Land Minesdots
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    Author: Vasudeva
    ASL Info:    43/M/irrelevant
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 24/27/23
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I wrote this a while ago. I just came across it. Sometimes I forget to remember how lucky we in America truly are.


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    dotsTo the Makers of Land Minesdots
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    The Cambodian Refugees,
    seemingly without a voice-
    To the makers of land mines,
    Or whoever has the power:
    1 in 38 civilians
    has lost a limb
    to land mines!
    S T O P
    And think!
    Scream until sobs and prayers
    reach the Buddha.
    And the four corners of the land
    where peace and tranquility
    will happen
    just as the sutra promised..
    the land of eternal tranquil light.
    Even the rain
    will not so much as break
    a clod of earth.
    You are the land of the Buddha.
    You are higher,
    so devils attack
    with more ferocity.
    After all, they have
    more to lose.
    We pray into the night air,
    saturated with sweet incense.
    And fight to end
    a nation's incest.
    Surely the gods are crying.
    A trip to the market
    or
    a child chasing a butterfly
    or simply
    going to fetch some water,
    need not end
    in death!








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