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    dots Submission Name: A city of Crumbled Wallsdots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       based on 911, persident bush


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    dotsA city of Crumbled Wallsdots
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    Windows
    Is all that is left to look through
    They are the last thing standing
    As if windows could stand
    As if glass could tell the future

    Crumbles of buildings around me
    I must be in the city of lost hope
    And found misery and pain
    Where hate rules over everything

    The love that was here fell
    When the bombs started raining
    The rain felt as if it were acid
    And we drown in are own unhappy treas

    All because the guy in charge lied
    It wasn't are fault
    To be under bad rule
    To have a judement of another placed over us

    What was it like mom?
    To be in those peaceful days
    Where evrything was soild
    And hate was unknowen

    The windows
    Is all that is left
    They stand with the story to tell
    Of bombs raining down
    And acid rain fall
    People drown in thier own tears
    And all is crumbled




    Submitted on 2007-02-17 01:00:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is so brilliant, im gona ad it to my favs.
    Superb write
    | Posted on 2007-02-18 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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